Title: The Slow Burn
Chapter: 3 of ?
Fandom: Pitch Black
Synopsis: This is a reworked version of chapter 3 of The Slow Burn, which was my first attempt at fan fiction. It was semi-successful, but I stopped writing it after I found my real calling with Apprentice. Now I’m revisiting it. The story adds an original character to the group of survivors, and this time around I’m trying to strip away any and all Mary Sue qualities she possessed. In this heavily reworked chapter, Riddick makes his way back to the crash ship after having fruitlessly explored the nearby area, still operating under the assumption that this planet has normal days and nights.
Seeeeeeee why I always try conning, ahem, convincing ya to do my words for me?
I could so see/hear R seeing and thinking so clear. And allow me to take a moment of silence for the not-so-lucky peep in cryo-chamber one hundred and twenty seven.
Heee! I’m glad his voice is ringing true! And yeah, poor whatshisname has been MONCHED. Which means something now knows humans are tasty…
I do love your Riddick’s voice. Dangerous, powerful, ruthless, and then surprisingly protective when it comes to people he decides aren’t enemies.
Awesome! He’s fun to write, and to give different back-stories to. This time around, I want to give him more depth and complexity than simply being super into Fiona, LOL!